When i was at the beach. saw the girl and the old man talking and touching seaweed. the girl face is happy and the old man face is happy too.
the girl felt like that her uncle and the old man felt like that his ness. and i hear someone splashing the sea water and people playing volleyball.
and see people eating ice cream and people drinking water and fizzy drink and the other team won. the other team lose and they didn't fight they just said let play again. and they played again
and i look somewhere else and i saw people swimming. and some are building sand castle and are playing rugby. and three people was lying down the beach and i saw people eating on the mat. and after that i went home the beach was cool.
THE END.
Jerome
Hola Jerome,
ReplyDeletemy name is Cia. I am a Summer Learning Journey blogger who will be working with Ako Hiko bloggers at May Road School over the summer holidays.
That was really descriptive, I like that you took the time to talk about all the people and sights you saw as a person on the beach. You have written a really detailed paragraph, maybe next time you could include an awesome picture to go along with your writing!
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